composition assignment-Is happiness a state of mind?

2019-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Lainey

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Yes. I think happiness is a state of our mind. Seen from a distance, happiness is concerned with wide variety of factor. Love, friendship, health, stability, family, money, food, clothing, and shelter.. Nonmaterial and material factors concern our happiness. So we are confused what is the main factor to be happy. But I would like to say, this things influence our mind. Thus people can feel happy or not.

강사 첨삭

Hi Su ^^


Great job. ^^

Keep moving forward.

I believe in you...\\m/...


T. Lainey <\",)))><


Yes. I think happiness is a state of our mind.

>>> correct


 Seen from a distance, happiness is concerned with wide variety of factor. 

>>> Seen from a distance, happiness has a lot of factors.


Love, friendship, health, stability, family, money, food, clothing, and shelter.

>>> correct


 Nonmaterial and material factors concern our happiness.

>>> correct


 So we are confused what is the main factor to be happy.

>>> So, sometimes we get confused about the main factor of being happy.


 But I would like to say, this things influence our mind.

>>> correct


 Thus people can feel happy or not.

>>> Thus, people can choose to be happy or not.

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