composition assignment-Is happiness a state of mind?
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Yes. I think happiness is a state of our mind.
>>> correct
Seen from a distance, happiness is concerned with wide variety of factor.
>>> Seen from a distance, happiness has a lot of factors.
Love, friendship, health, stability, family, money, food, clothing, and shelter.
>>> correct
Nonmaterial and material factors concern our happiness.
>>> correct
So we are confused what is the main factor to be happy.
>>> So, sometimes we get confused about the main factor of being happy.
But I would like to say, this things influence our mind.
>>> correct
Thus people can feel happy or not.
>>> Thus, people can choose to be happy or not.
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