composition: does everything happen for a reason?
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No, I don't believe that everything happens for a reason although I admit that there are things or happenings that cannot be explained by science. In our daily lives, a lot of things are happening even at this moment: someone is run over by a car, fire breaks out, a person is diagnosed of serious disease, a stock market plunges, etc. Does the happening have every reason? Yes or no depending on what it is. Yes, there are invisible forces around us, so happenings might have correlation with other factors that we cannot actually see. However, believing the god creates and controls everything is going too far. As a human being, we have a strong will and power to lead our lives and get over difficulties we face from time to time. It does not mean we must challenge the god, but we should not simply give in to the difficulties.
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Hi there Sir [이름]^^
Thank you for sharing your opinion about the topic. You were able to convey your thoughts easily. Wonderful! I respect your opininion about this matter. Have you ever thought about, have you every thought about why do people die and live? Tell me about it later in class. I\'m excited to talk to you. Have a great day!
Teacher Nina
No, I don\'t believe that everything happens for a reason although I admit that there are things or happenings that cannot be explained by science.
>> Correct!
OR >> No, I don\'t believe that everything happens for a reason although I admit that there are things or situations that cannot be explained by science.
In our daily lives, a lot of things are happening even at this moment: someone is run over by a car, fire breaks out, a person is diagnosed of serious disease, a stock market plunges, etc.
>> In our daily lives, a lot of things are happening even right at this moment: a car run over someone, fire breaks out, a person is diagnosed with a serious disease,stock market plunges, etc.
OR >> In our daily lives, a lot of things are happening even right at this moment: someone is hit by a car, fire breaks out, a person is diagnosed with a serious disease,stock market plunges, etc.
Does the happening have every reason?
>> Did you mean: Does evey situation happens for a reason?
OR >> Does every happening have a reason?
Yes or no depending on what it is.
>> It might be yes or no depending on what is it.
Yes, there are invisible forces around us, so happenings might have correlation with other factors that we cannot actually see.
>> Yes, there are invisible forces around us, so some happenings/situations might be correlated with other factors that we cannot actually see.
However, believing the god creates and controls everything is going too far.
>> However, believing that God creates and controls everything is going too far.
As a human being, we have a strong will and power to lead our lives and get over difficulties we face from time to time.
>> Correct!
It does not mean we must challenge the god, but we should not simply give in to the difficulties.
>> It does not mean we must challenge God, but we should not simply give in to the difficulties.
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