Composition: should allow students to have jobs while they are students?

I do not oppose that teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Not all students are in the same situation and they may have good reasons for their working. A financial reason might force them to work or a student might choose to work at his/her own will to get experience to develop his/her career. Thus, we cannot simply say that students should not have jobs while they are students. In order to ban students who are working because of financial difficulties of their families from working, the government should fully support the families. Can the government afford such subsidies? Instead, we need to develop a program and social safety nets to ensure that students who want to study do not give up his/her objectives of achieving academic progress and success due to financial reasons. Taking look at our society, there are countless prominent figures who succeeded without going to school. Our society should encourage people to explore various ways other than only studying.

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