composition: should we let our teens to make their own decisions?

2013-05-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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A lot of education experts or counselors recommend that parents encourage their kids to make their own decisions and respect their opinions. It sounds perfectly alright. However, in reality, parents tend to intervene in all aspects of their kids’ lives such as what to wear, what to eat, what to study, whom to meet, how to behavior, etc. This is because most parents think that teenagers aren't old enough to think farther. Therefore, parents always make decisions for their teenage children. Although they make mistakes and their decisions may not be right, parents need to be opened and make efforts to view things from our children's standpoint. Parents should be there to help when our children make wrong decisions. Parents should let our teenage children become who they want to be not who the parents envisioned them to be. All in all, we, parents, should support teenagers to make their own decisions for better future.

강사 첨삭

SIR KOHI^^ Thanks for sending this in today. I really had a great time reading your composition. You made my day! Your shared your thoughts well. ^^ Keep up the good work!Please go over the corrections I gave below. We can just talk about it on our next class. Take Care! ~T.Nina~ A lot of education experts or counselors recommend that parents encourage their kids to make their own decisions and respect their opinions. >>Correct  It sounds perfectly alright.>>Correct However, in reality, parents tend to intervene in all aspects of their kids’ lives such as what to wear, what to eat, what to study, whom to meet, how to behavior, etc. >>However, in reality, parents tend to intervene in all aspects of their kids\' lives such as what to wear, what to eat, what to study, whom to meet, how to behave etc.  This is because most parents think that teenagers aren\'t old enough to think farther. >>Correct  Therefore, parents always make decisions for their teenage children. >>Correct Although they make mistakes and their decisions may not be right, parents need to be opened and make efforts to view things from our children\'s standpoint. >>Although they make mistakes and their decisions may not be right, parents need to be open and make efforts to view things from their children\'s standpoint.  Parents should be there to help when our children make wrong decisions. >> Parents should be there to help when children make wrong decisions.  Parents should let our teenage children become who they want to be not who the parents envisioned them to be. >>Parents should let our teenage children become who they want to be not who their parents envisioned them to be. All in all, we, parents, should support teenagers to make their own decisions for better future. >>All in all, we, parents, should support teenagers to make their own decisions for a better future.

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