Composition: slow living
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강사 첨삭
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I prefer to take the time and live life at a slower pace.
>>I prefer to take my time and live my life at a slower pace.
I think everybody wants to live a slow life.
>>Correct!
However, situations force us to hurry up in modern society.
>>However, situations force us to hurry up [act in haste] in a modern society.
At work, there is always a deadline.
>>Correct!
Even if there is no a due date, you need to reply or complete a task promptly, which is a general practice.
>>Even if there is no due date, you need to reply or complete a task promptly, as part of general practice.
Your boss and colleagues are expecting and they will praise your quick response.
>>You boss and colleagues will expect for this and they will praise you for your quick response.
If you were late or slow, you would be assessed as a poor performer and your chances of getting a promotion would be lowered.
>>Correct!
So in order to survive and win the competition, we all have been fooled into thinking that we need or even must be fast.
>>Correct!
However, my personal characteristics tend to be a bit lazy.
>>Correct!
I’m sometimes late for a meeting or an appointment and often in a hurry because of leaving things till the last minute.
>>Correct!
Living a slow life does not mean the procrastination, but we’d rather need to prepare well in advance, so we can enjoy slow living lead a mindful life.
>>Living a slow life does not mean procrastination, but we\'d rather need to prepare well in advance, so we can enjoy living slowly as we are led to a mindful life.파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.