Composition: the greatest invention
학생이 쓴 원문
We can think of a lot of great inventions that have impacted our society to a great extent. They are automobiles, Internet, lights, television, etc. Of them, I think that the Internet was the greatest invention. The Internet has dramatically changed politics, business, how we socialize and our very culture. Young children will never fully understand what a life changing experience the Internet has had on our society because they do not know life without it. The impact of the Internet is far greater than any other communicative tools in the history of mass communications. Which other inventions in the last century allows us to email, instant message, research an automobile, access a library, blog, purchase or sell stock, buy airline tickets, book a hotel and see the world without even leaving our chairs? The Internet has dramatically reshaped the way people interact. Nowadays, we can hardly think of our daily lives without the Internet.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Sir [이름]^^
A happy Tuesday to you^^ How was your day? Great composition! Yes, I do agree with you. Internet is really useful. It made our lives better and easier. Can you live without the internet? What do you usually do when you surf the internet? Let\'s talk about it in class. See you!
Teacher Nina
We can think of a lot of great inventions that have impacted our society to a great extent.
>> We can think of a lot of great inventions that had an impact in our soceity to a great extent.
They are automobiles, Internet, lights, television, etc.
>> Correct!
Of them, I think that the Internet was the greatest invention.
>> Of these, I think the internet was the greatest invention.
The Internet has dramatically changed politics, business, how we socialize and our very culture.
>> The internet dramatically changed politics, businesses, how we socialize with other people and even our culture.
Young children will never fully understand what a life changing experience the Internet has had on our society because they do not know life without it.
>> Corect!
>> OR: Young children will never fully understand a life changing experience what the internet brought into our society because they don\'t know how life is without it.
The impact of the Internet is far greater than any other communicative tools in the history of mass communications.
>> Correct!
>> OR: The impact of internet is far greater than any other method of communcation in history.
Which other inventions in the last century allows us to email, instant message, research an automobile, access a library, blog, purchase or sell stock, buy airline tickets, book a hotel and see the world without even leaving our chairs?
>> Which other inventions in the last century allows us to email, instant message, research an automobile, access the library, blog, purchase or sell stocks, buy airline tickets, book a hotel and see the world without even leaving our chairs?
The Internet has dramatically reshaped the way people interact.
>> Correct!
Nowadays, we can hardly think of our daily lives without the Internet.
>> Correct!
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