Composition: the invention of the automobile
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The automobile affected society by unifying the population. Prior to the invention of the automobile, people rarely traveled outside of their communities, but with the automobile, people could travel farther than they ever had before, allowing them to share and exchange ideas, trends, and information. The automobiles have changed the way people live all over the world. They have affected all aspects of society such as family life, the economy, and even the environment. Without the automobile, our communities would be isolated, so no cultural exchange would be made. The automobile carries not only people but also culture from one place to another so that it contributes to creating new culture. The automobiles have caused serious problems like air pollutions, accidents, traffic congestion, etc., however, there is no perfect invention that does not have any side effects. The invention of the automobile has brought more positive effects than any other invention.
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Hi there Sir [이름]^^
It\'s your favorite day! A terrific Friday to you! I know that you are really waiting for this day. I think in some schools, today is the start of their summer vacation. How about your daughter? When is the start of her summer vacation? I do agree with you. Automobile made the life of people easier especially when it comes to travelling. It is really nice to have a car nowadays. We can talk more about this later in class. See you!
Teacher Nina
The automobile affected society by unifying the population.
>> The automobile affected the society by unifying the population.
Prior to the invention of the automobile, people rarely traveled outside of their communities, but with the automobile, people could travel farther than they ever had before, allowing them to share and exchange ideas, trends, and information.
>> Prior to the invention of the automobile, people rarely traveled outside of their communities. But with the invention of automobile, people could travel farther than ever before, allowing them to share and exchange ideas, trends, and information with other people.
The automobiles have changed the way people live all over the world.
>> Correct!
>> OR: The automobiles changed the way people live all over the world.
They have affected all aspects of society such as family life, the economy, and even the environment.
>> They affected all aspects of the society such as family life, the economy, and even the environment.
Without the automobile, our communities would be isolated, so no cultural exchange would be made.
>> Correct!
The automobile carries not only people but also culture from one place to another so that it contributes to creating new culture.
>> The automobile carries not only people but also culture from one place to another so it contributes in creating a new culture.
The automobiles have caused serious problems like air pollutions, accidents, traffic congestion, etc., however, there is no perfect invention that does not have any side effects.
>> Correct!
>> OR: The automobiles have caused serious problems like air pollution, accidents, traffic congestion, etc. However, there is no perfect invention that doen\'t have a negative effect.
The invention of the automobile has brought more positive effects than any other invention.
>> Correct!
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