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2016-01-12 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Dear Teacher, A happy Tuesday to you! ^^ I just got a call from the bank and they said that my installment savings has matured. To withdraw my money from the account, I need my identification but I didn't bring it. There is a saying that 'Drop by drop fills the tub'. Somehow, I can feel content and glorious of the money even if the amount is small. I have not thought about what I am going to do with the money. In this case, there is a big possibility for me to deposit the money in another bank account newly. I am just sad that the bank interest these days is too low. ^^;; That is all for today and see you tomorrow! Have a great day!*^^*

강사 첨삭

Good morning once again, [이름]!^^ Congratulations on your fully matured investment!^^ However, I hate to hear that the bank interest got lower but I believe this is still worth it for you to save more. You can use the money for some things you need for your wedding, right? See you tomorrow!^^~~Teacher Erine~~ Dear Teacher, >> CorrectA happy Tuesday to you! ^^ >> CorrectI just got a call from the bank and they said that my installment savings has matured. >> Correct To withdraw my money from the account, I need my identification but I didn\'t bring it. >> CorrectThere is a saying that \'Drop by drop fills the tub\'. >> There is a saying \"Drop by drop fills the tub.\"  (Remove that because it is only a saying.)Somehow, I can feel content and glorious of the money even if the amount is small. >> CorrectI have not thought about what I am going to do with the money. >> CorrectIn this case, there is a big possibility for me to deposit the money in another bank account newly. >> In this case, there is a big possibility for me to deposit the money in another new bank account. (Better use the adjective in this sentence) I am just sad that the bank interest these days is too low. ^^;; >> CorrectThat is all for today and see you tomorrow! >> CorrectHave a great day!*^^* >> Correct

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