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Dear Teacher,
A happy Tuesday to you! ^^
I just got a call from the bank and they said that my installment savings has matured.
To withdraw my money from the account, I need my identification but I didn't bring it.
There is a saying that 'Drop by drop fills the tub'.
Somehow, I can feel content and glorious of the money even if the amount is small.
I have not thought about what I am going to do with the money.
In this case, there is a big possibility for me to deposit the money in another bank account newly.
I am just sad that the bank interest these days is too low. ^^;;
That is all for today and see you tomorrow!
Have a great day!*^^*
강사 첨삭
Good morning once again, [이름]!^^
Congratulations on your fully matured investment!^^
However, I hate to hear that the bank interest got lower but
I believe this is still worth it for you to save more.
You can use the money for some things you need for your wedding, right?
See you tomorrow!^^~~Teacher Erine~~
Dear Teacher,
>> CorrectA happy Tuesday to you! ^^
>> CorrectI just got a call from the bank and they said that my installment savings has matured.
>> Correct To withdraw my money from the account, I need my identification but I didn\'t bring it.
>> CorrectThere is a saying that \'Drop by drop fills the tub\'.
>> There is a saying \"Drop by drop fills the tub.\" (Remove that because it is only a saying.)Somehow, I can feel content and glorious of the money even if the amount is small.
>> CorrectI have not thought about what I am going to do with the money.
>> CorrectIn this case, there is a big possibility for me to deposit the money in another bank account newly.
>> In this case, there is a big possibility for me to deposit the money in another new bank account. (Better use the adjective in this sentence) I am just sad that the bank interest these days is too low. ^^;;
>> CorrectThat is all for today and see you tomorrow!
>> CorrectHave a great day!*^^*
>> Correct
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