Compositioon

2016-01-14 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Good morning, Teacher! I have a question. Do you have durian chips there? I really like having that and I bought a lot of durian chips when I came back from Bangkok. Almost every day, I eat them after dinner and I can't stop eating them. It seems like I am addicted to its heavenly taste. However, I found that a lot of pimples are coming out on my forehead and I guess they are caused by having durian chips a lot. I had not eaten snacks before I met them, especially stir-fried chips but durian chips are an exception for me. ㅠㅠ As I know, oily foods can cause pimples to get worse. That is why I have stopped eating that with tears from two days before and the symptom is getting better. I can say that this situation is a kind of torture for me. ㅠㅠ Well, let me face it. ^^;; See you tomorrow! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hey, Durian-taste lover, [이름]!^^ I have heard about the durian chips but I\'m not sure where to buy them. As far as I can remember, I haven\'t seen any of those here in the city I am working for. While I was reading your composition, I thought that you were like a kid who really likes something!^^ kkk Thanks for sharing!^^~~Teacher Erine~~ Good morning, Teacher! >> CorrectI have a question. >> Correct Do you have durian chips there? >> CorrectI really like having that and I bought a lot of durian chips when I came back from Bangkok. >> Correct (I think we have it but not here in Baguio.)Almost every day, I eat them after dinner and I can\'t stop eating them. >> CorrectIt seems like I am addicted to its heavenly taste. >> CorrectHowever, I found that a lot of pimples are coming out on my forehead and I guess they are caused by having durian chips a lot. >> However, I found that a lot of pimples are coming out on my forehead and I guess they are caused by having a lot of durian chips. (sentence pattern)I had not eaten snacks before I met them, especially stir-fried chips but durian chips are an exception for me. ㅠㅠ >> CorrectAs I know, oily foods can cause pimples to get worse. >> CorrectThat is why I have stopped eating that with tears from two days before and the symptom is getting better. >> That is why I have stopped eating that with tears from two days ago and the symptom is getting better. (before vs. ago)I can say that this situation is a kind of torture for me. ㅠㅠ >> CorrectWell, let me face it. ^^;; >> CorrectSee you tomorrow! ^^ >> Correct

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·