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2016-01-15 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Dear Teacher, A happy Friday to you! It seems like weekend always makes me happy and energetic. Even though I don't have a special plan, just the thought of taking a rest on the weekend gives me energy. I suddenly remembered what you said during our class. "We are getting order." Oh my god, I forgot to bring my pouch!!!!!!!! Indeed, it is signs of ageing. ㅠㅠ What can I do for myself? It seems like I am naked. Now, my lips are pale and I even look like the Mona Lisa because of my half of remaining eyebrows. Fortunately, there is a pencil and it can be a alternative. Well, I need to go to a cosmetic store to put on basic make-up with samples. At this moment, I need to be brave! Hahaha Erine, I hope you won't be like me. ^^;; That is all for today and have a great weekend! Take care! ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!^^
While I was reading your message, it came to my mind that

you are really older than I am!^^ kkkk

But don\'t you worry, for you, your pouch is the most important thing

that you shouldn\'t forget but it happened today.

In my case, last Tuesday, I forgot to wear my second most important

thing (aside from my intimates), my belt!^^ kk

We are indeed getting older but I think, we have to live our lives to the fullest!

~~Teacher Erine~~

Dear Teacher,

>> Correct
A happy Friday to you!

>> Correct
It seems like weekend always makes me happy and energetic.

>> Correct
Even though I don\'t have a special plan, just the thought of taking a rest on the weekend gives me energy.

>> Correct
I suddenly remembered what you said during our class.

>> Correct
\"We are getting order.\"

>> \"We are getting older.\" (Spelling)
Oh my god, I forgot to bring my pouch!!!!!!!!

>> Correct (OMG!!!)
Indeed, it is signs of ageing. ㅠㅠ

>> Correct
What can I do for myself?

>> Correct
It seems like I am naked.

>> Correct
Now, my lips are pale and I even look like the Mona Lisa because of my half of remaining eyebrows.

>> Correct (This sounds terrible!)
Fortunately, there is a pencil and it can be a alternative.

>> Fortunately, there is a pencil and it can be an alternative. (Article usage)
Well, I need to go to a cosmetic store to put on basic make-up with samples.

>> Correct
At this moment, I need to be brave! Hahaha

>> Correct
Erine, I hope you won\'t be like me. ^^;;

>> Correct
That is all for today and have a great weekend!

>> Correct
Take care! ^^

>> Correct

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