Compulsory military service

2016-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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In many countries, military services is compulsory. Korea is no exception. On the one hand, I think why do we forced to go in the army? On the contrary, what would happen if we are not to go in the army? In essence, let's think about this problem. Suppose any country in the world don't have troops. Will it be no war? Will people live peaceful? Wouldn't people have the ambition of invasion? I think the answer is "no". Troops isn to be done to protest the country from other invasion. There are two different military servicess. One is compusory, the other is volunteer military system. Volunteer military system needs many natioal budget. Before the decision, it takes into account national economy. Anyway I think troops is presence. If it is not, will it be peace, or war? that is question.

강사 첨삭

Hello there sir!

How was it during your time in the military? I\'m sure it\'s very different before compared to your son\'s time. Let\'s talk about it in class. See you!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

In many countries, military service is compulsory.

>> correct!

Korea is no exception.

>> correct!

On the one hand, I think why do we forced to go in the army?

>> On the other hand, why are we forced to go to the military?

On the contrary, what would happen if we are not to go in the army?

>> On the contrary, what would happen if we do not to go in the army?

In essence, let\'s think about this problem.

>> correct!

Suppose any country in the world don\'t have troops.

>> correct!

Will it be no war?

>> Will there be war?

Will people live peaceful?

>> Will people live peacefully?

Wouldn\'t people have the ambition of invasion?

>> correct!

I think the answer is \"no\".

>> correct!

Troops isn to be done to protest the country from other invasion.

>> Troops aren\'t done to protect the country from others invasion.

There are two different military services.

>> correct!

One is compusory, the other is volunteer military system.

>> One is compulsory and the other is voluntary military system.

Volunteer military system needs many natioal budget.

>> Voluntary military system needs a big national budget.

Before the decision, it takes into account the national economy.

>> correct!

Anyway I think troops is presence.

>> Anyway, I think troops should be present.

If it is not, will it be peace, or war? that is question.

>> If it is not present in a country, would there be peace or war? That is the question.

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