Computer

2015-11-09 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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Computer help us to find out information that we didn't know. If yu write in the computer it is much easier because you can copy lots of them and easy to put pictures on. I also like to play comuter games. I play Minecraft and GTA and they are really cool and amazing games. If you just sit and do computer it will hurt your eyes and get lazy. So please do enough of computer games.There are lots of people in this world who gets really crazy when they do computer games. Have you ever went to Casino? What is your favourite game, theacher Mayleen?

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Hi Min! Happy Monday to you lad!^.^   Like what we\'ve discussed in class, there are pros and cons in using a computer. It can help you with so many things but using it too much isn\'t good, okay?:p You said you like playing computer games but do that only when you\'re done with your homeworks. I\'m not really into computer games but my son likes playing minecraft too. I often scold him because he would insist to play even if I already said \"no\". Anyway, thank you for this composition, Min. Good job to you.   I\'ve never been to a casino and have no plans of enetering one.^____-   Stay positive. Please take care. Good night!:p   ~Teacher Mayleen~   Computer help us to find out information that we didn\'t know. >> Computers help us find out information the we don\'t know. If yu write in the computer it is much easier because you can copy lots of them and easy to put pictures on. >> If you write using your computer, it is much easier since you can copy and paste sentences and pictures from the internet. I also like to play comuter games. >> CORRECT OR: I also like playing computer games. I play Minecraft and GTA and they are really cool and amazing games. >> I play minecraft and GTA which are really cool and amazing games. If you just sit and do computer it will hurt your eyes and get lazy. >> Using the computer often can damage the eyesight in some cases make people lazier. So please do enough of computer games. >> So please don\'t play computer games too often or too much. There are lots of people in this world who gets really crazy when they do computer games. >> There are a lot of people in the world who became addicted to playing computer games.Have you ever went to Casino? >> Have you ever been to a casino?What is your favourite game, theacher Mayleen? >> What is your favorite game, Teacher Mayleen?

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