confliction is necessary.
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Hi,
Thank you for your composition, I enjoyed reading it.
You are correct that in a relationship, conflict always exists.
Continue to aim high for you to reach your goal in life.
Keep safe.
Goodbye!
T.Nina^^
In human relationship, conflicts are always existing.
>> Conflict always exists in human relationships.
because every one has own needs, and goal.
>> Because every individual varies in their own needs and goals.
there is adequate mean to achieve that goal, people want to get that with paying lower price.
>> People want to achieve their goals by paying lower prices.
but in the case of their goals are not comparable, they have to fight for their goal.
>> But in case that their goals are too high to achieve, they need to fight for it.
When they want to solve their problem, they must to compromise their problem.
>> If they want to solve their problem, they must make a way for it.
So, No confliction means people have no goals.
>> But if there is no conflict, it doesn\'t mean that people have no goals.
and that means dictator compromise a problem with his own idea.
>> And it means that dictators would compromise the problem through their own idea.
If Society has many problems, that means the society is helthy.
>> If the society has many problems, it means the society is healthy.
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