Conflicts make a cost

2014-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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We are in conflicts with other people everyday. It occured on a road, company, restaurant and so on. Maybe, It can cause a fight with friend in school. It can make you feel dizzy If it occurred it your company. It can make an accident on the roads. Probably, there will be some casualties. From these conflicts, we have to pay the cost about the result of these. The first thing we have to pay is emotion. we feel sad or angry, after arguing with friends or neighbors. Even we feel sick and It can develop to disease. the most critical thing is the truth that It can make scar in our mind which couln't be erased forever. The second thing is money. we have to compensate what we have done. the cost is dependant on Who's fault, but it only reduce your cost, not meaning you don't have to pay even a part of the cost. For example, We can easily find the situation from car accident. It is very costly and make people scar on their mind.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름],

Thank you for your time again.

I totally agree with you.

Conflicts can lead to accidents too.

We should know how to handle it and fixed it immediately.

Have a great day.

Teacher Nina


We are in conflicts with other people everyday.

>> Did you mean: We can have a conflict with other people everyday.

>> OR: Conflicts happen everyday.
It occured on a road, company, restaurant and so on.

>> It may occur on the road, company, restaurant and so on.
Maybe, It can cause a fight with friend in school.

>> Correct!
It can make you feel dizzy If it occurred it your company.

>> Did you mean: It can make you feel uncomfortable if it occured in your company. ( What do you mean by dizzy? ^^ Please explain it in class. )
It can make an accident on the roads.

>> It can cause accidents on the road.
Probably, there will be some casualties.

>> Correct!

From these conflicts, we have to pay the cost about the result of these.

>> Did you mean: Becuase of these conflicts, we have to be open about the consequences.

The first thing we have to pay is emotion.

>> The first thing we have to pay for is the emotion.
we feel sad or angry, after arguing with friends or neighbors.

>> Correct!
Even we feel sick and It can develop to disease.

>> We even feel sick and it can develop to a disease.
the most critical thing is the truth that It can make scar in our mind which couln\'t be erased forever.

>> The most critical thing is the truth that it can make a bad memory which couldn\'t be erased forever.
The second thing is money.

>> Correct!

we have to compensate what we have done.

>> Correct!
the cost is dependant on Who\'s fault, but it only reduce your cost, not meaning you don\'t have to pay even a part of the cost.

>> Did you mean: The cost depends on who\'s fault, but it can only be reduced.
For example, We can easily find the situation from car accident.

>> Did you mean: For example. we can find out what happened from a car accident.
It is very costly and make people scar on their mind.

>> It is very costly and make a memory on a person\'s mind.

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