conservation issues
학생이 쓴 원문
Yesterday as I was shopping, I was thinking of \'conservation issues\', homework.
In my opinion, these are absolutely important to our lives.
These days many things are been dying due to people\' faults.
So we have to be alert to these.
I think It is more important to conserve human activities and tradition rather than plants and animals.
Therefore I think it is our responsibility to conserve human activities and tradition.
For small practice, we must first have the preciousness of people and tradition.
강사 첨삭
H[이름]!
Did you have a good weekend?
I hope you did.
Thank you for doing your homework.
In this composition, please take note of how to express general ideas.
It would also be good if you included some concrete examples to emphasize your main idea.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Yesterday as I was shopping, I was thinking of \'conservation issues\', homework.
>> As I was shopping yesterday, I was thinking of my homework about \"conservation issues.\"
In my opinion, these are absolutely important to our lives.
In my opinion, these are absolutely important to our lives.
>> In my opinion, this is absolutely important in our lives.
These days many things are been dying due to people\' faults.
These days many things are been dying due to people\' faults.
>> These days, many things have been dying due to people\'s faults.
So we have to be alert to these.
So we have to be alert to these.
>> So we have to be alert about these.
I think It is more important to conserve human activities and tradition rather than plants and animals.
I think It is more important to conserve human activities and tradition rather than plants and animals.
>> I think it is more important to conserve human activities and traditions rather than plants and animals.
Therefore I think it is our responsibility to conserve human activities and tradition.
Therefore I think it is our responsibility to conserve human activities and tradition.
>> Therefore, I think it is our responsibility to conserve human activities and traditions.
For small practice, we must first have the preciousness of people and tradition.
For small practice, we must first have the preciousness of people and tradition.
>> In order to practice these in small ways, we must first appreciate the preciousness of people and traditions.
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