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2010-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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The most important aspact of me is the confidence. Before, I had a fright to speak English with foriners. However, now I have over come the awesome by visiting an English country. Nowadays even singing pop-song and conversing with forieners have become my favorit hobbies. I'm distinctly sure that I can be a great diplomat official who engages in trading, studying, valenteering. Among diverse activities, particularly I focus on Cultural exchange. That is my philosophy and I'm going to adhere to my thought. So, I'll be an authentic global leader, Thank you for listening my introducing

강사 첨삭

It뭩 my pleasure to read it. I뭢 having a great time,

I뭠l send you the last page, too. 

The most important aspact of me is the confidence.

>> The most important aspect of me is confidence.

Before, I had a fright to speak English with foriners.

>> Before, I am afraid to talk to foreigners using English language.

However, now I have over come the awesome by visiting an English country.

>> However, now I overcame it by visiting an English-speaking country.

Nowadays even singing pop-song and conversing with forieners have become my favorit hobbies.

>> Nowadays, I even sing pop songs and I love talking to foreigners.

>> Nowadays, singing pop songs and talking to foreigners became one of my favorite hobbies.
I'm distinctly sure that I can be a great diplomat official who engages in trading, studying, valenteering.

>> I뭢 distinctly sure that I can be a great diplomat official who engages in trading, studying, and volunteering.

Among diverse activities, particularly I focus on Cultural exchange.

>> Correct

That is my philosophy and I'm going to adhere to my thought.

>> COrrect

So, I'll be an authentic global leader, Thank you for listening my introducing

>> So, I뭠l be an authentic global leader, thank you for reading my introduction. 

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