continued yesterday diary

2011-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Faye

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becasue already japan had very bad financial condition. for example japan's debt is more bigger than GDP about twice. and they had a very low tax rate. if they increase the tax rate for recover economic , how many have a difficulty to get a tax from japanies people. my professor agreed some my opinion but not agree some opinion. and he teach me another advice to view more widley and creative think of economic. so that is why i felt what a happy day. Thank you. and how can i know that exceed 800word ? when i wrote above my diary yesterday, i never knew tha exceed 800words before received warning message. it it is not good please improve this problem~~!! ^^

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Hello [이름] [이름]!             I’m sorry but I didn’t know that, that kind of problem existed on that part. I would suggest maybe you coul try typing in the microsoft word first so that you can monitor how many words you used. I would also try to raise that question with our manager. Thank you for noticing it. See you in class. T.Faye   This is also the continuation of your corrections. becasue already japan had very bad financial condition.>>Because Japan is already in a very bad financial condition.for example japan's debt is more bigger than GDP about twice. and they had a very low tax rate.>>For example, Japan’s debt is twice bigger that that of GDP and they have a very low tax rate. if they increase the tax rate for recover economic , how many have a difficulty to get a tax from japanies people.>>If they increase the tax rate to recover from economic crisis, the Japanese people will have a difficult time paying their taxes.my professor agreed some my opinion but not agree some opinion.>>My professor agreed with some of my opinions but did not agree with some also.and he teach me another advice to view more widley and creative think of economic.>>He also gave me advice on how to view it widely and creatively.so that is why i felt what a happy day. >>So that is why I feel happy today.Thank you.>>Correct!and how can i know that exceed 800word ? >>How will I know if I exceeded 800 words?when i wrote above my diary yesterday, i never knew tha exceed 800words before received warning message.>>When I wrote in my diary yesterday, I did not know that I already exceeded 800 words not until I received a warning.it it is not good>>It is not good.please improve this problem~~!! ^^ >>Please improve this problem.

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