Contribution part 2
학생이 쓴 원문
Third, my social and soft skills. After joining Busan Bank, I was selected as one of the Best Freshman and become a cover model in the promotional magazine.
I am very excited to utilize this merits in the Goizueta community and help build a welcoming environment.
Finally, my multicultural exposures to Canada, Japan, and China. I can understand many people with different culture and I would like to be a successful moderator of possible conflicts in the community.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!^^
Thank you for letting me check your answer to one of the interview questions that they might ask you. I finally knew that Goizueta Business School was named after Roberto C. Goizueta.
Third, my social and soft skills. After joining Busan Bank, I was selected as one of the Best Freshman and become a cover model in the promotional magazine.
>>>Third is my social and soft skills. After joining Busan Bank, I was selected as one of the Best Freshmen and became a cover model in a promotional magazine.
I am very excited to utilize this merits in the Goizueta community and help build a welcoming environment.
>>>I am very excited to utilize this merits to the Goizueta community and help build a welcoming environment.
Finally, my multicultural exposures to Canada, Japan, and China.
I am very excited to utilize this merits in the Goizueta community and help build a welcoming environment.
>>>I am very excited to utilize this merits to the Goizueta community and help build a welcoming environment.
Finally, my multicultural exposures to Canada, Japan, and China.
>>>Finally is my multicultural exposures to Canada, Japan, and China.
I can understand many people with different culture and I would like to be a successful moderator of possible conflicts in the community.
>>>I can understand many people with different cultures and I would like to be a successful moderator of possible conflicts in the community.
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