cooking
학생이 쓴 원문
In many cultures, women cook more often than men. Why is this?
I guesss, With the development of the industry, It seems like outdoor work is more important than house chores. Although the fact is opposite. Housework is essential to live and maintain society. and in some aspects, it could be a purpose to live. However it can\'t make money. so that\'s the biggest reason why it is considered like less important work. and men dumps this to their wife. And that could be the reason why many people think that cooking is women\'s job, and on the contrary men possess famous cheif\'s positions.
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doing your homework! Please take note of the ff:
a. Only the first letter of a sentence is capitalized.
b. Use proper
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- Debbie
I guesss, With the development of the industry, It seems like outdoor work is more important than house chores.
>> With the development of the industry, it seems like outdoor work is more important than house chores.
Although the fact is opposite. Housework is essential to live and maintain society.
>> Although it may not housework is essential to living and maintaining society.
and in some aspects, it could be a purpose to live.
>> Moreover, in some aspects, it could be a reason to live.
However it can\'t make money. so that\'s the biggest reason why it is considered like less important work.
>> However, it can\'t make money, so that\'s the biggest reason why it is considered like less important work.
and men dumps this to their wife.
>> It\'s the reason why men dump this to their wives.
And that could be the reason why many people think that cooking is women\'s job, and on the contrary men possess famous cheif\'s positions.
>> That could be the reason many people think cooking is a woman\'s job, though most famous chefs are men.
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