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학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I think that beauty is important.
1. Beauty can give a good first impression to the other person.
2. Beauty can mean self-care.
3. In Korea society, beauty is advantageous when I comes to get a job.
4. Beauty can raise my self-esteem.
5. There are many people who want to hang out with people who has excellent appearance.
강사 첨삭
Hi here [이름] [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your opinion about beauty :)
Yes, I think that beauty is important.
>>> CORRECT!
1. Beauty can give a good first impression to the other person.
>>> CORRECT!
2. Beauty can mean self-care.
>>> CORRECT!
3. In Korea society, beauty is advantageous when I comes to get a job.
>>> In Korean society, beauty is an advantage when you\'re looking for a job.
4. Beauty can raise my self-esteem.
>>> CORRECT!
5. There are many people who want to hang out with people who has excellent appearance.
>>> There are many people who want to hang out with people who has an excellent appearance.
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