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I\'d rather be rich and unhappy, because even though my life must be unstable and unsatisfying, I could make other people happy with my wealth. And by doing that, I can make the society better, thus my environment and social relationship also can be changed.
It doesn\'t mean that I would sacrifice for the society, rather I will change the world to feel more happiness.
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Hi Sydney!^^
It doesn\'t mean that I would sacrifice for the society, rather I will change the world to feel more happiness.
I\'d rather be rich and unhappy too.
We need money and we can buy anything that we want.
Andrea
I\'d rather be rich and unhappy, because even though my life must be unstable and unsatisfying, I could make other people happy with my wealth.
>> I\'d rather be rich and unhappy because even though my life is unstable and unsatisfying, I could make other people happy with my wealth.
And by doing that, I can make the society better, thus my environment and social relationship also can be changed.
>> Correct
It doesn\'t mean that I would sacrifice for the society, rather I will change the world to feel more happiness.
>> It doesn\'t mean that I would sacrifice for the society, rather I will change the world to feel happier.
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