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학생이 쓴 원문
I like my home but I\'m not attached to the one I\'m living now. It has been about 3 months since I moved from my previous house, and I liked the former one more. It was warmer and cozier there and my room was also larger.
Almost only thing that I like about my home now is the view which is better than the one that I lived before. It\'s a scenery of Han River and it was interesting to me that I can see the river from the living room, since it was impossible before. In addition, in a practical view, I can use this as a tool to check the air condition. There are several bridges across the river and I can confirm today\'s air condition by counting how many bridges I can see clearly. Frankly speaking, this way is pretty inaccurate. I just added because this is a pros of my home that I can think of when I squeeze my brain.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! Very genuine and relatable. We could miss the warmth and coziness of a former home while trying to find appreciation in the new one.
-T. Sonny
I like my home but I\'m not attached to the one I\'m living now.
>>I like my home, but I\'m not attached to the one I\'m living in now.
It has been about 3 months since I moved from my previous house, and I liked the former one more.
>>Correct!
It was warmer and cozier there and my room was also larger.
>>Correct!
Almost only thing that I like about my home now is the view which is better than the one that I lived before.
Almost only thing that I like about my home now is the view which is better than the one that I lived before.
>>The only thing I really like about my current home is the view, which is better than the one I had before.
It\'s a scenery of Han River and it was interesting to me that I can see the river from the living room, since it was impossible before.
>>It’s a view of the Han River, and I found it interesting that I can see the river from the living room, since that wasn’t possible before.
In addition, in a practical view, I can use this as a tool to check the air condition.
>>Also, from a practical point of view, I can use this as a way to check the air quality.
There are several bridges across the river and I can confirm today\'s air condition by counting how many bridges I can see clearly.
>>There are several bridges across the river, and I try to estimate the air condition by counting how many bridges I can see clearly.
Frankly speaking, this way is pretty inaccurate.
>>Frankly speaking, this method is pretty inaccurate
I just added because this is a pros of my home that I can think of when I squeeze my brain.
>>I just added it because it\'s one of the few pros I could think of when I really squeezed my brain.
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