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학생이 쓴 원문
My favorite dessert is ice cream. Desserts are usually eaten after the meal, so that I prefer desserts that can give clean feeling after having them. Other desserts satisfies me for sure, but the special thing about ice cream is that it\'s not only sweet but also icy compare to other desserts. This characteristic gives me clean feeling as I eat it, and I feel like my stomach is digesting the meal more easily. As positive experiences and emotions about ice cream accumulates, I\'m keep looking for it after having a meal frequently.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! It’s interesting how you connect the icy texture of ice cream to a sense of digestion and refreshment. That’s a unique perspective! It’s almost like a mini reset for your palate and stomach.
-T. Sonny
My favorite dessert is ice cream. >>Correct!
Desserts are usually eaten after the meal, so that I prefer desserts that can give clean feeling after having them.
>>Since desserts are usually eaten after a meal, I prefer ones that leave a clean, refreshing feeling.
Other desserts satisfies me for sure, but the special thing about ice cream is that it\'s not only sweet but also icy compare to other desserts.
>>Other desserts satisfy me, of course, but what makes ice cream special is that it’s not only sweet; it’s also icy compared to other desserts.
This characteristic gives me clean feeling as I eat it, and I feel like my stomach is digesting the meal more easily.
>>This quality gives me a clean sensation as I eat it, and it makes me feel like my stomach is digesting the meal more easily.
As positive experiences and emotions about ice cream accumulates, I\'m keep looking for it after having a meal frequently.
>>As positive experiences and emotions associated with ice cream have accumulated, I find myself looking for it more and more often after meals.
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