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학생이 쓴 원문
If I could swtich lives with someone for a day, I would switch with my father. I want to know how it is like to be a parent. I want to understand the emotions and attentiveness of parents toward their children. I believe that I would be comprehending my parents\' perspectives more fully by switching lives for a day.
The reason that I especially chose my father rather than my mom is because I spend much lesser time with my father. He\'s usually out for work that I had less chances to communicate or spend time with him. Switching lives with him will help me to get to know him more deeply. Moreover, since he is a head of household I would be understanding the burden of that position, which I\'m curious of. I think switching lives would be the only way to feel exact burden of it, and in that way I\'ll have more potent respectation to my father.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! A lot of people might choose a celebrity or someone famous, but choosing your dad says a lot about how much you value your family. Experiencing his day-to-day life would definitely help you understand the weight he carries and how he expresses love in his own way. I think it’s really touching that you want to connect with him on a deeper level and gain a new kind of respect for him.
-T. Sonny
If I could swtich lives with someone for a day, I would switch with my father.
>>If I could switch lives with someone for a day, I would switch with my father.
I want to know how it is like to be a parent.
>>Correct!
I want to understand the emotions and attentiveness of parents toward their children.
>>Correct!
I believe that I would be comprehending my parents\' perspectives more fully by switching lives for a day.
>>I believe that by switching lives for a day, I would be able to better understand my parents’ perspectives.The reason that I especially chose my father rather than my mom is because I spend much lesser time with my father.
>>The reason I chose my father rather than my mother is because I spend much less time with him.
He\'s usually out for work that I had less chances to communicate or spend time with him.
>>He’s usually out working, so I’ve had fewer chances to communicate or spend time with him.
Switching lives with him will help me to get to know him more deeply.
>>Switching lives with him would help me get to know him more deeply.
Moreover, since he is a head of household I would be understanding the burden of that position, which I\'m curious of.
>>Moreover, since he is the head of our household, I would gain insight into the weight of that responsibility, which I’m very curious about.
I think switching lives would be the only way to feel exact burden of it, and in that way I\'ll have more potent respectation to my father.
>>I think switching lives would be the only way to truly feel the burden he carries, and through that, I would develop a deeper sense of respect for my father.
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