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3.I studied about Arab.I spent time with local people, I could be accepted, experienced see various their own things.For example, although I’m Buddhist, I went to their mosque to attend. And eat local food, wear their traditional food. Also, in service field, I worked with think customer always first, and our family. I cached the most important thing is bright smile, good attitude. Because our attitude would affect customer’s feeling. I think all my experiences in work very useful to working as a crew. 4.I believe I can do well time management and keep to health. Both are always, everywhere important point. When I worked, I went to work about 30minutes or hour earlier for check condition there and communicate with regularly customers. Every morning, at least 4times a week do jogging, jump rope. It’s my best way to keep health. And I think health, time management skill is essential part. 5.I made the study club for more study.So, I met professor and sc[이름]l staff for get room,
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Here are my corrections for you:
3.I studied about Arab.
>> Correct
>> OR: I studied about Arab people.
I spent time with local people, I could be accepted, experienced see various their own things.
>> I spent time with local people and for me to be accepted I need to experience various things with them.
For example, although I’m Buddhist, I went to their mosque to attend.
>> For example, I\'m a Buddhist but I still tried to visit their mosques to attend their ceremony.
And eat local food, wear their traditional food.
>> And eat their traditional food.
Also, in service field, I worked with think customer always first, and our family.
>> And I also tried going in their service field which I learned to think customer and family first.
I cached the most important thing is bright smile, good attitude.
>> The most important thing that I like is a bright smile which is a positive attitude.
Because our attitude would affect customer’s feeling.
>> Correct
>> OR: Because our attitude would be a great impact to our customers\' feelings.
I think all my experiences in work very useful to working as a crew.
>> I believe that all my experiences are very useful in working as a crew.
4.I believe I can do well time management and keep to health.
>> I believe that I am good in time management and maintaining my health.
Both are always, everywhere important point.
>> Both are always working hand in hand.
When I worked, I went to work about 30minutes or hour earlier for check condition there and communicate with regularly customers.
>> I usually worked 30 minutes to an hour to check and communicate with the regular customers.
Every morning, at least 4times a week do jogging, jump rope.
>> Every morning atleast four times a week I do jogging and the jumping rope.
It’s my best way to keep health.
>> It\'s my best way to be physically fit.
And I think health, time management skill is essential part.
>> And I believe that health, time management skills are very essential.
5.I made the study club for more study.
>> I created a study club to promote learning.
So, I met professor and sc[이름]l staff for get room.
>> So I met my professor and the s[이름]l staff to get a room.
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