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Hi RJ
I couldn't pick up your phone last night.
Sorry about that.
I seemed to sleep deeply.
I couldn't move at all eventhough I heard a bit the phone was ringing.
I'm terribly tired nowadays as my son woke up often at night.
He's trying to learn to piss without a diaper even at night.
So he woke up often due to the reason and took time to sleep again.
I expected all good things when my baby has recognition about that.
But, it has also a bad point.
from raining Korea.
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Hi [이름]ny,
I thought so, you never miss our class so I thought to myself, "poor [이름]ny, she must be really tired". I had a feeling you were already asleep. That's good news, well, good and bad. Your son is starting to learn how to go to the bathroom but not by himself. I actually had to speak at a seminar today for some government workers in the Philippines. I thought it would be simple because I'm a teacher and I'm used to speaking, I was wrong. I was so nervous while I was speaking that my voice was shaky. I also noticed some people were starting to lose interest halfway through my speech. I noticed my weak point is giving a speech at formal meetings. I have to get better at that.
-From raining Philippines, RJ
PS
Your sentence "I seemed to sleep deeply." is actually correct when it comes to grammar. The reason I corrected it is because I don't hear anyone use this sentence. Instead, I used a more commonly used phrase.
Also, "piss" is like a slang word so I suggest to use "go to the bathroom" instead. You can also use the word most people use when they talk about their children taking a piss which is "go pee-pee" (sounds cute and it's used for little children)
Hi RJI couldn't pick up your phone last night.
>>correctSorry about that.>>correctI seemed to sleep deeply.
>>I seemed to be in a deep sleep.I couldn't move at all eventhough I heard a bit the phone was ringing.>>I couldn't move at all even though I could hear a bit the phone ringing a bit.I'm terribly tired nowadays as my son woke up often at night.
>>I'm terribly tired nowadays as my son wakes up often at night.
He's trying to learn to piss without a diaper even at night.
>>He's trying to learn how to go to the bathroom at night. /or/ He's trying to learn how to go pee-pee on his own at night.So he woke up often due to the reason and took time to sleep again.>>So he wakes up often due to that reason and takes time to sleep again.I expected all good things when my baby has recognition about that.
>>I expected all good things when my baby becomes aware of that.
But, it has also a bad point.>>correctfrom raining Korea.
>>correct
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