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When did you get your first cell phone?
- 8years ago, i got a cell phone. I bought to my pocket money.
Do you know anyone who doesn't own a cell phone?
- No, I didn't know. Even thought my young nieces have cell phone.
But babys might be don't have cell phone.
how much do you think is appropriate for a teenager's monthly cell phone bill?
- I think 30~40$ appropriate for monthly cell phone bill
For what purpose do you think a teenager nees a cell phone?
- when they are in danger they can cry for help.
And for make new friends.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Jiho! It was nice to read your composition! Thank you for sending it! Moreover, your answers are pretty good yet I suggest you to be very careful of your punctuation marks and be aware of the capitalization of words. Be familiar of the correct sentence patterns as well as the be-verbs to be used in your sentences. Anyway, you did few glitches so be a bit more careful of your expressions next time. Good job and I look forward for more compositions from you! Take care and enjoy the day! See you later!
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When did you get your first cell phone?
>> CORRECT- 8years ago, i got a cell phone.
>> I got my first cellphone 8 years ago.
>> I had my first cellphone 8 years ago.
I bought to my pocket money.>> I bought it using my pocket money.
>> I bought it using my money.
>> I bought it with my money.Do you know anyone who doesn't own a cell phone?
>> CORRECT- No, I didn't know.
>> No, I don't know anyone.
Even thought my young nieces have cell phone.
>> Even my young nieces have their own cell phones.But babys might be don't have cell phone.>> But babies surely can't use cell phones yet so they can't have it.how much do you think is appropriate for a teenager's monthly cell phone bill?
>> CORRECT- I think 30~40$ appropriate for monthly cell phone bill
>> I think 30 to 40 dollars is appropriate for their monthly cell phone billFor what purpose do you think a teenager nees a cell phone?
>> CORRECT- when they are in danger they can cry for help.
>> CORRECT
>> when they are in danger, they can call/ask for help.And for make new friends.
>> CORRECT
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