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2010-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Nick

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Life is boring without travel. Our life style are simply and monotonous. But travel take a given something new. through the travel we can feel exciting, and can get recharge the life. Donald Trump said "If you're interested in balancing work and pleasure, stop trying to balance them. Instead make your work more pleasurable" I agree that. so, I will get a travel reated job. So I'm preety happy what i'm doing enjoy my work, my like.

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Hello there!You wrote a very interesting composition here. I agree with you, traveling gives us a lot of experiences where we can learn a lot of lessons from. I only have a few corrections though. Keep it up and have a good night!     Life is boring without travel. >> Life is boring without travelling.Our life style are simply and monotonous. >>Our lifestyle is just simple and monotonous.But travel take a given something new. >>But travelling can give us something new.through the travel we can feel exciting, and can get recharge the life. >>Through travelling, we can feel excitement, and can recharge our energy.Donald Trump said "If you're interested in balancing work and pleasure, stop trying to balance them. Instead make your work more pleasurable" >> Donald Trump said, "If you're interested in balancing work and pleasure, stop trying to balance them. Instead make your work more pleasurable".I agree that. so, I will get a travel reated job. >>I agree with that, so I will get a job related with travelling.So I'm preety happy what i'm doing enjoy my work, my like. >>So I’m pretty happy that I am enjoying my work and I like it.  

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