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2014-01-13 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I found a writing topic in the internet! This is the topic : Which place would you prefer to live in? Big city or Small town. 1. I prefer to live in middle sized city. There are both positive and negative aspects that we live in big city and small town. Big city provides convinient living infrastructure, huge shopping center like department store and lots of cultural places, but it also has weaknesses that it is too polluted and crowded and the price level is much higher than small town. Moreover, it is hard to make familiar relationship with neighborhood. ... to be continue in another writing

강사 첨삭

Hello there and happy Monday!

Glad to say you want to keep things simple by living in a middle sized city^^

I love the way you stated your take on this topic^^

Have a great week and see you!

I found a writing topic in the internet!

>>I found a writing topic on the Internet!
 This is the topic : Which place would you prefer to live in? Big city or Small town.
>> This is the topic : Which place would you prefer to live in? Big city or small town?
1.I prefer to live in middle sized city.

>>CORRECT!

There are both positive and negative aspects that we live in big city and small town.

>>There are both positive and negative aspects if we live in big city or small town.

Big city provides convinient living infrastructure, huge shopping center like department store and lots of cultural places, but it also has weaknesses that it is too polluted and crowded and the price level is much higher than small town.

>>Big city provides convenient living infrastructure, huge shopping centers like department store and lots of cultural places, but it also has weaknesses like it is too polluted and crowded and the price level is much higher than in small town.

>>Big city provides convenient living facilities, huge shopping centers like department stores and lots of historical places.

>>However, it also has weaknesses like it is too polluted and crowded and the cost of living is much higher than in small town.

Moreover, it is hard to make familiar relationship with neighborhood.
>>Moreover, it is hard to make friends with the neighborhood.
... to be continue in another writing

>>To be continued in another writing.



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