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2014-01-13 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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2 However, habitants of small town are usually familiar with their neighborhood comparatively and they could live in peaceful fresh air, but small town also has weaknesses that it is lacking working places for young generations, means of transfortation and cultural places. So I want to live in middle-sized city where I have been living in. It contains strengths of big city and small town. Jeonju is my home town and it is not too small and not too big. I have never felt unconvinience, as it contains essential infrastructure.

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However, habitants of small town are usually familiar with their neighborhood comparatively and they could live in peaceful fresh air, but small town also has weaknesses that it is lacking working places for young generations, means of transfortation and cultural places.

>>The habitants of small town are usually friendly with their neighbors comparatively and they could live in peaceful fresh air.

>>On the other hand, small town also has weaknesses due to its lack of companies to offer work for the young generation, means of transportation and cultural places.

So I want to live in middle-sized city where I have been living in.

>>Therefore, I want to live in middle sized city like the place where I have been living in.

It contains strengths of big city and small town.

>>It contains the strengths of a big city and small town.

Jeonju is my home town and it is not too small and not too big.

>>Jeonju is my hometown and it is not too small nor too big.

I have never felt unconvinience, as it contains essential infrastructure.

>>I have never felt inconvenience, as it contains infrastructure essential to live a hassle free life.



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