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2014-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

학생이 쓴 원문

Part1 I came back to my hometown last Saturday. Since I had decided to go to the mission work, time flied like an arrow. Timor-leste(East Timor) is a country that has miserable history. it had been conquered from Portugal, Japan and Indonesia for 500 years. It became independent in 1999 but it still doesn't seem like an valuable country. Our mission team 'BRIDGE' visited that place to let them know the gospel and to provide necessary medical treatment. My role in the team was receptionist in the medical part. I checked some pain or disease of the patient firstly and sent to the doctor.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!

How are doing?

It\'s good to that you are back safe.

And it\'s good to hear that you were able to help other people.

You are such a good person and you have a good heart.

Isn\'t it? ^^

See you again  tomorrow.

T. Rose ^^

Part1
I came back to my hometown last Saturday. 

>>  correct!

Since I had decided to go to the mission work, time flied like an arrow.

>>  Since I decided to go to work in the mission, time flies like an arrow.

Timor-leste(East Timor) is a country that has miserable history.

>>  Timor-leste(East Timor) is a country that has a miserable history.

it had been conquered from Portugal, Japan and Indonesia for 500 years.

>>  It had been conquered by Portugal, Japan, and Indonesia for 500 years.

It became independent in 1999 but it still doesn\'t seem like an valuable country.

>>  It became independent in 1999 but it still doesn\'t seem like a valuable country.

Our mission team \'BRIDGE\' visited that place to let them know the gospel and to provide necessary medical treatment.

>>  correct!

My role in the team was receptionist in the medical part.

>>  My role in the team was a receptionist in the medical part.

I checked some pain or disease of the patient firstly and sent to the doctor.

>>  I checked some pain or diseases of the patients first and then send them to the doctor.

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