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SMART Phone makes us IDIOT human.
Few years ago, we could easily hear that television is a idiot-box, television steals our attention, don't watch the television over an hour in a day and so on. At that time, it was the most interesting device and it destroyed our interpersonal communication. But it could affect to us, only we sitting in front of the television.
Smart phone is more serious than television. It takes our attention any time, any place. Even walking, talking and eating, we are using it. I am the one who is addicted to smart phone, i think. Not only it take my time, but also destroy my living pattern. Although I know the bad effects of it, i cannot quit using it. It is too useful to stop using. Sometime i think that if it had never been made, I could have lived more healthy.
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Hello there. :)
You can always discipline yourself in using your smart phone. It really depends on the person using it. :) All you need is control and discipline. :) As for the homework, you did a good job writing it. Just be mindful of your capitalization. :)
Have a great night. :)
SMART Phone makes us IDIOT human.>>Samrt Phones make us idiots.Few years ago, we could easily hear that television is a idiot-box, television steals our attention, don\'t watch the television over an hour in a day and so on.
>>Few years ago, we could hear that the television is just an idiot box. Television steals our attention. And don\'t watch the television over an hour everyday and so on.
At that time, it was the most interesting device and it destroyed our interpersonal communication.
>> Correct.
But it could affect to us, only we sitting in front of the television. >> But it could affect us when we only sit in front of the television the whole day.
Smart phone is more serious than television.
>> Correct.
It takes our attention any time, any place.
>> It takes most of our time.
Even walking, talking and eating, we are using it.
>> Even when we are talking, walking and eating; we are still using it.
I am the one who is addicted to smart phone, i think.
>> Correct. (But always check the right capitalization of words.)
Not only it take my time, but also destroy my living pattern.
>> It does not only take my take but also destroys my lifestyle.
Although I know the bad effects of it, i cannot quit using it.
>> Correct. (But always check the right capitalization of words.)
It is too useful to stop using.
>> Correct.
Sometime i think that if it had never been made, I could have lived more healthy. >> I sometimes think that if it was never invented, I could have a healthier lifestyle.
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