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Good day to you!

I am so thankful that you took the time to discuss this topic.

You tried to explain your opinion and even give an example to strengthen your point.

I do have some corrections so your explanation will be clearer.

I hope you consider them.

Teacher Lexi^^

 Topic : Attending a live performance is more enjoyable than watching the same event on TV.
I agree with this statement. 

>>correct

At the live performance, we can directly watch the whole performance and feel the performers and other spectators.

It make us excited.

>>It makes us excited.

Attending the live performance, although the performer would be looked smaller, we can share each other’s feeling.

>>Although the performers look smaller in a live performance, we can share each others\' feelings.

Even if TV show you the performer much bigger, it cannot touch our mind like the live performance.

>>Even if the performer looks much bigger on TV, he or she cannot touch our feelings just like in a live performance.

For example, there is a TV show named ‘I am a singer’.

>>Correct OR >> For example, there is this TV show entitled \"I am a singer\".

Through this show, famous singer remake and sing a song.

>>correct OR >> _famous singer remake a song as they sing it.

It make a hit.

>>It was a hit.

I also watched that show.

>>correct

It was fantastic as much as I hear that songs everyday.

>>It was fantastic and I listened to the song almost everyday.

However, one day, I found the surprising thing that the spectators who were watching the live performance were crying for happiness.

>>Correct OR >> However, I was surprised to learn that the spectators who watched the live performance cried because of happiness.

I was curious why they cried, but I don\'t know their feeling.

>>Correct

Because, I haven’t visited that live performance until now. 

>>Because I haven\'t been to any of their live performances until now. 

I still watch that show through the TV.

>>I still watch the show on TV.