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2014-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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The time what give to me only a month. First of all, I will close an installment savings account and then I will spend it for myself moreover I will quit my job. When I was [이름], I used to want a trip around the world so I will go to a tour around the world and try many countries’ traditional local food through travel because I like eating local food. During travel, I will have many experiences and I will make friends of foreigner. In addition, I will teach Korean’s traditional to them about table manners, be respectful to adults, and Korean honorific speech. After travel, I will watch my favorite Tv program all day. I can not usually watch the Tv since I am always busy and I do not have enough time so during a day, I will watch Tv all day. My favorite programs are variety shows and dramas because they have many kinds of genre. I like variety shows especially because there are many stars and then, they always show new subjects, so they give joy to me.

강사 첨삭

Hello Bea! I hope that you can reach all your dreams in life. Enjoy everything while you are [이름]. Have a great day! ~Kelly^^ The time what give to me only a month. >> I only have one month left to enjoy my life. First of all, I will close an installment savings account and then I will spend it for myself moreover I will quit my job. >> First of all, I will close an installment savings account and then I will spend it for myself. Moreover I will quit my job. When I was [이름], I used to want a trip around the world so I will go to a tour around the world and try many countries’ traditional local food through travel because I like eating local food. >> When I was [이름], iIhave dreamt of traveling around the world so I am going to tour around the world and visit many countries and try local foods because I love eating local foods. During travel, I will have many experiences and I will make friends of foreigner. >> While traveling , I will try many things and will make foeriegn friends. In addition, I will teach Korean’s traditional to them about table manners, be respectful to adults, and Korean honorific speech. >> In addition, I will share Korean traditions with regards to table manners, being respectful to adults and Korean hnorific speech. After travel, I will watch my favorite Tv program all day. >> After traveling, I will watch my favorite TV program all day. I can not usually watch the Tv since I am always busy and I do not have enough time so during a day, I will watch Tv all day. >> I cannot watch TV since I am always busy and I do not have enough time during the day so I will watch TV all day. My favorite programs are variety shows and dramas because they have many kinds of genre. >> My favorite TV programs are variety shows and dramas because there are many drama and variety programs that are being aired on TV. I like variety shows especially because there are many stars and then, they always show new subjects, so they give joy to me. >> I like variety show programs because I can see many celebrities and they always come up with new concepts so it gives me joy.

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