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2014-11-14 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

학생이 쓴 원문

I will read a book all day. I did not read a book recently so I will go to book store and then I will buy a short story poetical works because I like that. I was usually lazy so that I could not read many books. Even I have a pile of unread new books in the bookcase. furthermore, Because I think the best place is Jeju island in Korea so I will leave that. I have been to Jeju island several times. That has a wonderful beach and a lot of trees. Also , there are many kinds of delicious food. I made a feast of octopus Ramen individually so I want to eat that again. I will go to picnic with my family. When I was a child, my family sometimes went to picnic and then my parents showed many things to me so I will plan to take a trip with my parents at this moment. I want to give happy memories to my family.

강사 첨삭

Good morning Bea! Thank you for sharing your plans with me. Enjoy every moment with your family. Take care and have a good day! ~Kelly^^ I will read a book all day. >> Correct. I did not read a book recently so I will go to book store and then I will buy a short story poetical works because I like that. >> I haven\'t read a book recently, so I will go to a book store and buy a short poetical story because I like it. I was usually lazy so that I could not read many books. >> Correct. Even I have a pile of unread new books in the bookcase. >> I even have a pile of unread books in the bookcase. furthermore, Because I think the best place is Jeju island in Korea so I will leave that. >> Furthermore, because I think that the best place in Korea is Jeju island so I want to live there. I have been to Jeju island several times. >> Correct. That has a wonderful beach and a lot of trees. >> There are wonderful beaches and lots of tress there. Also, there are many kinds of delicious food. >> Also, there are many kinds of delicious foods. I made a feast of octopus Ramen individually so I want to eat that again. >> I made a feast of octopus ramen so I want to eat that again. I will go to picnic with my family. >> I will go on a picnic with my family. When I was a child, my family sometimes went to picnic and then my parents showed many things to me so I will plan to take a trip with my parents at this moment. >> When I was a child, my family sometimes went on a picnic and my parents showed many things to me so I am planning to take a trip with my parents. I want to give happy memories to my family. >> Correct.

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