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2014-11-17 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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I will go out with my mother because she is the most influential person in my life. We have same tendency.I always saw her working hard so I spend time with my mother. I will want to give the relaxation to suffering her. In addition I will watch the Twilight movies because my favorite movie is that series because I read the books. Before I watch the movies so when I watch the movies, I can comprehend the stories concretely and understand it easier. Also, the movie has a special story about a Vampire and a common woman who fell in love to each other. I prefer a genre of fiction and a material of novelty because It dose not happen in reality. So when I watched that, I imagined many things and my feeling was very happy so that I want to watched that again. And, I will leave on a trip with my friends. We have sent together for a long time but we did not leave on many trips so I will want leave on a trip either domestic travel or overseas travel. I would be happy with them.

강사 첨삭

Hello Bea! Good morning! Thank you for sharing your plans. I hope that you will enjoy your time with your mom and friends. Anyway, pleae review my corrections. Have a great day ahead! ~Kelly^^ I will go out with my mother because she is the most influential person in my life. >> Correct. We have same tendency. >> Did you mean: We have many things in common. I always saw her working hard so I spend time with my mother. >> I always see her work very hard so I want to spend time with her. I will want to give the relaxation to suffering her. >> I want to give her time to relax because she works very hard. In addition I will watch the Twilight movies because my favorite movie is that series because I read the books. >> In addition, I will watch the Twilight movies because they are my favorite movie series and I have the read the books also. Before I watch the movies so when I watch the movies, I can comprehend the stories concretely and understand it easier. >> I read the books before watching themovies so I cna comprehend the stories concretely and understand them easily. Also, the movie has a special story about a Vampire and a common woman who fell in love to each other. >> Also, the movie is a special story about a vampire and an ordinary woman who fell in love to each other. I prefer a genre of fiction and a material of novelty because It dose not happen in reality. >> I prefer fictions and novelty materials because they don\'t hapen in reality. So when I watched that, I imagined many things and my feeling was very happy so that I want to watched that again. >> So when I watched those kinds of movies, I imagined many things and my feeling was very happy that I want to watch them again. And, I will leave on a trip with my friends. >> Also I want to travel with my friends. We have sent together for a long time but we did not leave on many trips so I will want leave on a trip either domestic travel or overseas travel. >> We have spent time together but do not travel often so I want to take a trip with them either domestic or overseas. I would be happy with them. >> Correct.

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