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2015-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

학생이 쓴 원문

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. I agree. Usually, my family can meet in the evening. So we don't have enough time to talk. However my husband always watch some news through television. While he is watching TV, he doesn't speak anything. He just focus news. So, he can't have time to communicate with his children. I want him to communicate with our children. The television can deliver a lot of news but my family can have time of my family because of it. So, I try that when I stay at home with my children, I don't watch the television. While I don't watch the television, I am used to read a book and study English with my children.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^ Thank you so much for making your homework. I also agree with your opinion about the topic. It is true that we can get a lot of information from the TV but it ruins family communication. I also like your alternative activity. It is good that you read books. It can help you actually. Very good! ^^ Keep up the good work [이름]! Take care and have a great day ahead.   ~~Teacher Kris   Usually, my family can meet in the evening. >> Correct So we don\'t have enough time to talk. >> So, we don\'t have enough time to talk.However my husband always watch some news through television. >> However, my husband always watch some news through the television.While he is watching TV, he doesn\'t speak anything. >> Correct He just focus news. >> He just focus on the news.So, he can\'t have time to communicate with his children. >> CorrectI want him to communicate with our children. >> CorrectThe television can deliver a lot of news but my family can have time of my family because of it. >> The television can deliver a lot of news but my family can\'t have time because of it. So, I try that when I stay at home with my children, I don\'t watch the television. >> So, I try that when I stay at home with my children, I don\'t watch television.While I don\'t watch the television, I am used to read a book and study English with my children. >> While I don\'t watch television, I read a book and study English with my children.

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