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Latest I watched a movie called an International Mart.
It is a Korea movie.
The story of a movie were life of our father's in the Korean War.
In the Korean War, many father worked very hard.
For example, they entered a Vietnam War to get some money.
And they worked as a coal miner in Germany to get some money.
Also they sent the money to their family.
They always worked very hard for their family.
They were very poor and could learn education.
They missed their parent but they could meet their parent because of War.
While I watched this movie, I cried and I was sad.
I missed my parent and I decided that I will work very hard for my children.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Thank you for sharing about the movie that you watched. I think I will watch this soon.
Hopefully there\'s an English subtitle for that movie. Maybe I will cry also when I watch
the movie. Life a long long time ago was really difficult. We are lucky because we were not
born in those years.
I know that you miss your parents so mcuh. I can feel you. Just be a better mom to your children.
I think that is your mission. Good luck [이름]. Smile always. Don\'t cry. :)
Take care! ^^
See you! ^^
~~Teacher Kris
Latest I watched a movie called an International Mart.
>> The lates movie that I watched was entitled International Mart.It is a Korea movie.
>> It is a korean movie. The story of a movie were life of our father\'s in the Korean War.
>> The story of the movie was all about a life of a father in the Korean War. In the Korean War, many father worked very hard.
>> CorrectFor example, they entered a Vietnam War to get some money.
>> For exmplae, they entered the Vietnam War just to get some money. And they worked as a coal miner in Germany to get some money.
>> CorrectAlso they sent the money to their family.
>> CorrectThey always worked very hard for their family.
>> CorrectThey were very poor and could learn education.
>> They were very poor and could not learn Educaiton.They missed their parent but they could meet their parent because of War.
>> They missed their parents but they couldn\'t meet their parents because of war. While I watched this movie, I cried and I was sad.
>> While I was watching this movie, I suddenly cried and felt sad.I missed my parent and I decided that I will work very hard for my children.
>> Correct
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