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2015-02-23 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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I don't like Valentines day because it is business. I think that chocolate's companies make Valentines day for their profit. So I dont like it.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Happy Valentines! I was quite shocked with your thought about Valentines. Why do you hate Valentines so much? Yet Valentines day is the day of LOVE. :) Actually, not only chocolate companies are earning profit during the valentines day but a lot of people are also earning for selling gifts and flowers. You can not stop chocolate companies for making chocolates because people are demanding for it. By the way, I think the chocolate companies are not responcible for the decalaration of the the Valentines day so dont blame them. kk. I love you [이름]!kk. Spread the love! ^^   ~~Teacher Kris     I don\'t like Valentines day because it is business. >> I don\'t like valentines day because business establishments will grow.I think that chocolate\'s companies make Valentines day for their profit.>> I think that Chocolate companies made the Valentines day for their own profit. So I dont like it. >> So, I don\'t like it.

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