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학생이 쓴 원문
I want to live in a countryside because there are a lot of fresh air.
It is very important for our life.
I like there.
In the city, there are many cars and pollution.
However I want to live the city because of my children's education.
I think that the city is made the education environment.
After 3 years, I will move the city with my family downtown of Pyeougtaek.
Pyeougtaek city is not a big city but after 3 years, this city will be a big city.
So, I have to save a lot of money to move there.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! ^^
How are you? I hope you are feeling good today.
I can see that you have a goal in life. You have a big dream to achieve.
Good luck to you. I hope you will be able to meet your dreams and goals in life.
Take care always and good luck agaimn to you and to your family. :)
Bye bye [이름]! ^^ :(
~~Teacher Kris
I want to live in a countryside because there are a lot of fresh air.
>> I want to live in a countryside because the air is fresh. It is very important for our life.
>> It is very important for our lives. I like there.
>> I like it there. In the city, there are many cars and pollution.
>> Correct However I want to live the city because of my children\'s education.
>> However, I want to live the city because of my children\'s education.
I think that the city is made the education environment.
>> I think that the city is made for Education. After 3 years, I will move the city with my family downtown of Pyeougtaek.
>> After 3 years, my family and I will move in the city downtown of Pyeougtaek.Pyeougtaek city is not a big city but after 3 years, this city will be a big city.
>> CorrectSo, I have to save a lot of money to move there.
>> Correct
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