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2015-04-01 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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What’s one thing you could never live without and why? I can't live without my family. In the world, my family is only one. My parents went to heaven very early. So my family is my husband and my children. If I don't have my family, I couldn't live in the world. I don't have many friends and I don't meet new people because it is very difficult. My husband is my father and my boy friend to me. My children is my treasure and my girl friends to me. So my family is in the world to me.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!   I felt sad when I read your homework. I didn\'t know the feeling of having no parents at an early age. Well, I can say that I am lucky to have both of my parents but you are luckier to have a loving husband and children. I am hoping to have a beautiful family like yours in the future. kkk.   I salute you for being a family-centered person.   Anyway, thanks again for doing the homework despite your busy schedule.   Take care and see you soon.   ~~Teacher Kris   What’s one thing you could never live without and why?I can\'t live without my family. >> CORRECTIn the world, my family is only one.>> My family is only one in the whole world.My parents went to heaven very early.>> CORRECT >> OR: My parents passed away when I was very young.So my family is my husband and my children.>> So, my family consists only of my husband and my children.If I don\'t have my family, I couldn\'t live in the world.>> BETTER: If I don\'t have my family with me, I couldn\'t live in this world.I don\'t have many friends and I don\'t meet new people because it is very difficult.>> CORRECTMy husband is my father and my boy friend to me.>> My husband is like a father and a boyfriend to me.My children is my treasure and my girl friends to me.>> My children are my treasure and girlfriends to me as well.So my family is in the world to me. >> So, my family means the world to me.

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