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2015-04-29 · 첨삭 강사 Bella

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I like working with others. While I am working in my office, I can learn a lot of things from others. Also I can spend enjoyable time for all day. I think that all people should help themself together. I can get their ideas and they can get my ideas. I want to work for a long time with my co-workers and I want to give them my experience.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] - ^^ Thank you for sending another wonderful composition. You always find time to do your homework and I want you to know that I appreciate that. I know that you are always busy after work because at home you became a super woman to your daughters and husband. I wish that you are having a great evening. I\'ll talk to you tomorrow.   = Teacher Bella =     I like working with others. >> CORRECT! While I am working in my office, I can learn a lot of things from others. >> I learn a lot of things at work. Also I can spend enjoyable time for all day. >> I also enjoy every single day at work. I think that all people should help themself together. >> I think people need to help each other. I can get their ideas and they can get my ideas. >> We can share ideas with each other.   I want to work for a long time with my co-workers and I want to give them my experience. >> I want to work for as long as I can and share my experiences to my co workers.

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