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학생이 쓴 원문
I like working with others.
While I am working in my office, I can learn a lot of things from others.
Also I can spend enjoyable time for all day.
I think that all people should help themself together.
I can get their ideas and they can get my ideas.
I want to work for a long time with my co-workers and I want to give them my experience.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] - ^^
Thank you for sending another wonderful composition.
You always find time to do your homework and I want you to know that I appreciate that.
I know that you are always busy after work because at home you became a super woman to your daughters and husband.
I wish that you are having a great evening.
I\'ll talk to you tomorrow.
= Teacher Bella =
I like working with others.
>> CORRECT!
While I am working in my office, I can learn a lot of things from others.
>> I learn a lot of things at work.
Also I can spend enjoyable time for all day.
>> I also enjoy every single day at work.
I think that all people should help themself together.
>> I think people need to help each other.
I can get their ideas and they can get my ideas.
>> We can share ideas with each other.
I want to work for a long time with my co-workers and I want to give them my experience.
>> I want to work for as long as I can and share my experiences to my co workers.
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