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I agree. In my case, I have my mobile phone it has many functions. I can use SNS through it. So when I want to make contact my friends, I don't call them with my mobile phone. But I make contact through SNS with my mobile phone. I often forget my friend's phone number because of SNS. Also I don't know their feeling. That is why

Hi [이름]! ^^   Thank you for writing an essay about your favorite mobile phone. However, it is always a good idea that your first sentence contain the topic you are writing about so that your readers wouldn\'t be confused. Also, when you are going to use an acronym, add the definition because there are a lot of acronyms being used and its hard to memorize all of them. It is also a good idea to give some examples. ^^ Lastly, like I have mentioned before, do not start your sentences with \"because\", \"and\" or \"but\" since these words create a sentence fragment or a broken sentence.   Good work all in all. ^^   = Teacher Bella =     I agree.In my case, I have my mobile phone it has many functions. >> I agree that gadgets have many functions and I find my mobile phone very useful. I can use SNS through it. >> With my phone, I can access different social networking services or SNS like Kakao Talk, Naver Line or NateOn. So when I want to make contact my friends, I don\'t call them with my mobile phone.But I make contact through SNS with my mobile phone. >> When I contact my friends, I don\'t call them but just use SNS functions. I often forget my friend\'s phone number because of SNS. >> I often forget my friends phone numbers because of the convenience of using SNS. Also I don\'t know their feeling. That is why >> That is why I am also not sure of what they feel.