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2015-04-30 · 첨삭 강사 Bella

학생이 쓴 원문

I work in my office during the weekdays. My office produces wire harness which is like a human blood vessel. My office also deals with imports and exports. I am in charge of exports with wire harness to Serbia. I am currently in charge of collecting data and writing reports for my team. It is my main work. My boss ask a solution about a lot of problems to many teams. My team leader ask a lot of reports to need a solution about the problems. So I have to check and collect many data to write reports. Sometimes, I am angry and have a stress but I still like my job. I am pleased that my team leader believe me.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] -   It is always nice to hear that you are enjoying at work. That only goes to say that you are dedicated to your job. Thank you for sharing this to me. I would like to say that you are already improving on your sentence construction. Keep it up! ^^ I hope that you are having a wonderful evening. I\'ll talk to you tomorrow.   = Teacher Bella =     I work in my office during the weekdays. >> I work during weekdays. My office produces wire harness which is like a human blood vessel. >> CORRECT! My office also deals with imports and exports. >> CORRECT!I am in charge of exports with wire harness to Serbia.>> I am in charge of the export process to Serbia.   I am currently in charge of collecting data and writing reports for my team.>> CORRECT!   It is my main work. >> CORRECT!>> It is my main job. My boss ask a solution about a lot of problems to many teams. >> My boss asks solutions about different problems from many teams. My team leader ask a lot of reports to need a solution about the problems.>> My team leader asks a lot of reports about the problems that need solutions.   So I have to check and collect many data to write reports. >> Therefore, I have to check and collect data that I can use for my reports. Sometimes, I am angry and have a stress but I still like my job. >> Sometime, I get angry and stressed but I still like my job. I am pleased that my team leader believe me. >> I am pleased that my team leader believes in me.  

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