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I like shopping because I am a weman. Before I got married, I liked many band-name products. I bought many things after I saved some money for me. After I get married, I like really just window shopping. I think that it is very important to save money more than band-name products. Sometimes I buy them for my family. When I buy them I am happy. However when my husband buy my clothes for me, I really am happy more than when I buy them for my fimaly.

  Hi [이름]! ^^ > Wonderful job in writing your essay. You are getting better in your writing although we just need to work on some kinks like knowing when to use a simple or a compound/complex sentence. Good job all in all; just look over the essay to compare and contrast between what you wrote and the corrections I have made. > NOTE: Notice that there are different ways to refer to brand name products. ^^   All good things, ==Teacher Bella==   I like shopping because I am a weman. >> I like shopping because I am a woman. Before I got married, I liked many band-name products.I bought many things after I saved some money for me. >> Before I got married, I bought a lot of brand name or designer products after saving some money since I like these items. After I get married, I like really just window shopping.I think that it is very important to save money more than band-name products. >> However, after I got married, I just window shop since it is more important for me to save money rather than buy signature items. Sometimes I buy them for my family.When I buy them I am happy. >> There are times that I shop for my family which makes me happy. However when my husband buy my clothes for me, I really am happy more than when I buy them for my fimaly. >> Although, I am happier when my husband buys news clothes for me.