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My favorite sport is soccer. I like to watch soccer games on Tv. It is very exciting and powerful sport. It is very popular in Korea. World Cup in 2002 of Korea and Japen took place. My country soccer team became a top four in World Cup in 2002. So soccer team member are very famous and popular in Korea. However, after I am married, I am intersted of tennis because of my husband. He likes to play a tennis with his club. I hope that my children learn a tennis so after they grow up, they play a tennis with my husband.

Hello [이름]! ^^ Thank you for your essay and telling me all about your favorite sport. ^^ I like playing lawn tennis as well but I am horrible at table tennis (i.e. pingpong). Anyway, about your composition, you need to keep in mind the flow of thought or comprehensibility of the essay. For example, take a look at the correction of your first three sentences. It makes more sense to place the sentence describing soccer before the sentence that described where you usually watch the sport, right? If you have any questions, just ask me in or class, okay? ^^   See you in class!   ==Teacher Bella==     My favorite sport is soccer. I like to watch soccer games on Tv.It is very exciting and powerful sport. >> My favorite sport is soccer since it is a very exciting and powerful sport. That is why I like watching soccer on TV. It is very popular in Korea. >> CORRECT World Cup in 2002 of Korea and Japen took place.My country soccer team became a top four in World Cup in 2002. >> The Korean team took fourth place in the 2002 World Cup and they also played against Japan at that time. So soccer team member are very famous and popular in Korea. >> That is why the team is quite popular and famous in Korea. However, after I am married, I am intersted of tennis because of my husband. >> However, after I got married, I became interested in tennis because of my husband.   He likes to play a tennis with his club. >> He like to play tennis at the tennis club. I hope that my children learn a tennis so after they grow up, they play a tennis with my husband. >> I hope my children would learn how to play tennis when they grow up so they could play with their father.