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Hello [이름]!

You\'re really improving. Just make your point clear.

While I lost it, I couldn\'t do all my work when I found it. (This sentence is vague).

When I lost it, I couldn\'t do all my work. (better)

Teacher Venus^^

Let me tell you about my mobile phone.

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It has a lot of functions.
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For example it can be used as a camera phone, an mp3, a TV phone, a call phone, a GPS and an internet phone.
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It is small so it can be always with me.

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While I lost it, I couldn\'t do all my work when I found it.

>>>When I lost it, I couldn\'t do all my work.

Because it is very expensive so I can\'t buy it again for a long time.

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I like listening to music and watching movies on my mobile phone.

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I think it is the most useful thing in the world.

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If I don\'t have a mobile phone, my life would probably be different and difficult.

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