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But they have poorer nutirition than original ingredients.

>>>But they have poorer nutrients than the original ingredients.

While they are processed at the manufacturing factory, the ingrediendts are destroyed partly.

>>> While they are processed at the manufacturing factory, the ingredients are destroyed partly.

There should be artificial seasonings for better taste and preservatives for longer keeping.

>>>There should be an artificial seasoning for better taste and preservatives to keep it for a longer period of time.

Especially younger generation shoud avoid eating as possible as they can.

>>>Especially the younger generation, they should avoid eating these as possible as they can.

They are very good for the situation of emergency and our laziness.

>>> They are very good for  emergency situations and our laziness.

I want you to be and smart and picky for your healthy body.

>>>I want you to be smart and picky for your healthy body.