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When I was a child, I liked to play with my brother. I have a older brother who is one year apart in age. Even if he isn\'t nice to me now, we were on terms of intimacy each other. We played very roughly. Here is one episode that show how does we played wildly. We used to play sword fighting by branch. And oneday, I was hurted by my brother. The scar that is formed by that event looked like captin Hook\'s scar. So I had laughed at my freinds for sometimes. Anyway, there\'re many memories of childhood with him. And the fact I liked that times is sure even sometimes I was injured.
And I liked reading books when I was a child. Especially, I loved fiction books. Because I could unfolding the world of imagination as if I live in different world. But unfortunately I rarely read the literature. I think my sensitivities are gone as I grew older. So now, I read only social science books. Nonetheless, I think my reading history maybe affects positively to my learning ability.
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Hi, [이름]!
Good evening.
Thank you for submitting your answer to me. ^^
It seems like, you really had a lot of unforgettable childhood memories with your brother.
Have a good night!
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~Teacher Gina
>> CORRECT.
I have a older brother who is one year apart in age.
>> I have a brother who is one year older than me.
>> Or: I have an older brother and our age gap is one year.
Even if he isn\'t nice to me now, we were on terms of intimacy each other.
>> Even if he isn\'t nice to me now, we were good in terms of intimacy to each other.
We played very roughly.
>> CORRECT.
Here is one episode that show how does we played wildly.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Here is an instance when he showed playing wildly.
We used to play sword fighting by branch.
>> We used to play sword fighting using a branch.
And oneday, I was hurted by my brother.
>> And one day, I got hurt by my brother.
The scar that is formed by that event looked like captin Hook\'s scar.
>> The scare that was formed due to that event looked like Captain Hook\'s scar.
So I had laughed at my freinds for sometimes.
>> So I was laughed at by my friends for sometime.
Anyway, there\'re many memories of childhood with him.
>> Anyway, there were many memories I had with him in my childhood.
And the fact I liked that times is sure even sometimes I was injured.
>> I am sure and it\'s a fact that I liked those times even if I got injured before.
And I liked reading books when I was a child.
>> CORRECT.
Especially, I loved fiction books. Because I could unfolding the world of imagination as if I live in different world.
>> I especially loved reading fiction books because I could unfold the world of imagination as if I live in a different world.
But unfortunately I rarely read the literature. I think my sensitivities are gone as I grew older.
>> But unfortunately, I rarely read literature. I think my sensitivities were gone as I grew older.
So now, I read only social science books.
>> So now, I only read social science books.
Nonetheless, I think my reading history maybe affects positively to my learning ability.
>> Nonetheless, I think reading history may affect my learning ability positively.
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