Could there be another world war in the future? How can we prevent a world war from happening?

2018-11-29 · 첨삭 강사 Elisha

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I think if another world war will be happened, we will die. That mean is that the most people in the world will disappear and the others will live hardly. Because we already have terrible and powerful weapon and then if world war will be happened in the future, we will use every weapon for winning. Therefore I think we always communicate each other for releasing the conflict.

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-T. Elisha

I think if another world war will be happened, we will die.

>> I think if another world war is to happen, we will all die.

That mean is that the most people in the world will disappear and the others will live hardly.

>> Most people in the world will disappear and those who survived will be having a difficult life.

 Because we already have terrible and powerful weapon and then if world war will be happened in the future, we will use every weapon for winning.

>> We already have terrible and powerful weapons and if a world war is to happen in the future, we will use every weapon to win.

Therefore I think we always communicate each other for releasing the conflict.

>> Therefore, I think we should always communicate with one another to resolve conflicts.

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